Editing Activities for Writing a Case Study Report

Below you will find two sentences. How would you edit these sentences for grammar, spelling and referencing conventions?

Sentence 1

According to Shackle states that (1998) displaced aggression is where aggressive action is taken against an innocent person or object and usually occurs when the cause of disappointment is unknown or too powerful to attack (page 20).

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There are a number of problems in this sentence with the grammar and use of referencing conventions.

Here are two possible corrections:

  1. According to Shackle (1998) “displaced aggression is where aggressive action is taken against an innocent person or object and usually occurs when the cause of disappointment is unknown or too powerful to attack (p. 20).”
  2. Shackle (1998) states that displaced aggression is where aggressive action is taken against an innocent person or object and usually occurs when the cause of disappointment is unknown or too powerful to attack (p. 20).


Sentence 2

Sentence 2. Limiting an argument or possibilities to only two alternatives simplistic leading to a view of everything as "cops and robbers, happy or sad, gilty or innocent, yes or no situations. (Jones, S.F. 1990 - Chap. 3 page 156, in Arron)

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There are problems in the grammar, spelling and referencing conventions.

Here are two possible corrections.

  1. Limiting an argument or possibilities to only two alternatives is simplistic leading to a view of everything as "cops and robbers, happy or sad, guilty or innocent, yes or no situations” (Jones in Arron 1990, p.156)."
  2. Jones argues that limiting an argument or possibilities to only two alternatives is simplistic leading to a view of everything as "cops and robbers, happy or sad, guilty or innocent, yes or no situations" (in Arron 1990, p156).
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